Post by owlfeather on Aug 24, 2009 16:26:59 GMT
I was going to post this in the Help Wanted folder, but it seems to be locked. If you'd like me to post elsewhere, or use another means of reporting errors, don't hesitate to say.
I found few errors in book 6, mostly quibbles over phrasing.
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19 -> 2 footnote 1 Remember that you are looking at individual jars and may therefore purchase only one of each potion, should you decide to do so.
I disagree with the number of pots you can buy. The description at 19 says the apothecary is "vast" and a "famed establishment", not to mention serving a constantly war-torn region. The captain with you is buying a huge amount of pots for his men. Even though the tense at 2 for the pots is singular, I assume you can buy as many pots as you want, provided you have the coin and backpack space for them. "Hi, welcome to McDonald's! Sorry, we only have one cheeseburger for sale."
25 -> 165 (Kloon offers map for sale.)
25 -> 262 -> 116 -> 193 After wiping the blood from your hands, you pick up the Map of Varetta and hurry out of the room.
The mention of the map at 193 is confusing, since it isn't mentioned at all on the second path. Maybe a footnote saying you quickly search the room and find a map? Maybe changing THE map to A map would minimize confusion?
77 illustration 6 You rush to protect the captain from the snarling pirate >berserkers.
remove >
219 Suddenly, there is a mighty crash as the hall door is slammed shut. Into the tavern strides a black-browed young lordling, wearing a flamboyant costume of ebony and gold.
The description at 332 calls this a tavern hall. Perhaps this is common in Europe, but "hall door" makes me think of a hallway door, not the entrance to a tavern. It also seems the door would slam open, not shut, since Roark is striding into the tavern. In any case, these are minor points.
239 You are about to decline when says something that convinces you to share the journey.
...when HE says...
294 After the defeat of Barraka, they fled south to escape the Sommlending army. It was a common belief in the Lastlands that the brotherhood had been destroyed and their power extinguished forever, but this encounter proves otherwise.
Shouldn't the tense here be is, not was?
301 Your Arrow pierces the lordling's forearm as his sword descends, causing the blow to splinter stone, not skull. (...) Trembling with pain and fury, he staggers to his feet and demands his sword and cloak from the innkeeper before stumbling into the night with a welter of threats and curses.
Why demand his sword when he already has it? Maybe he demands his horse and cloak? Maybe just his cloak? In 78 -> 180 he demands neither and just staggers out. I had to assume he survived even though I got an auto-kill in 78.
I found few errors in book 6, mostly quibbles over phrasing.
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19 -> 2 footnote 1 Remember that you are looking at individual jars and may therefore purchase only one of each potion, should you decide to do so.
I disagree with the number of pots you can buy. The description at 19 says the apothecary is "vast" and a "famed establishment", not to mention serving a constantly war-torn region. The captain with you is buying a huge amount of pots for his men. Even though the tense at 2 for the pots is singular, I assume you can buy as many pots as you want, provided you have the coin and backpack space for them. "Hi, welcome to McDonald's! Sorry, we only have one cheeseburger for sale."
25 -> 165 (Kloon offers map for sale.)
25 -> 262 -> 116 -> 193 After wiping the blood from your hands, you pick up the Map of Varetta and hurry out of the room.
The mention of the map at 193 is confusing, since it isn't mentioned at all on the second path. Maybe a footnote saying you quickly search the room and find a map? Maybe changing THE map to A map would minimize confusion?
77 illustration 6 You rush to protect the captain from the snarling pirate >berserkers.
remove >
219 Suddenly, there is a mighty crash as the hall door is slammed shut. Into the tavern strides a black-browed young lordling, wearing a flamboyant costume of ebony and gold.
The description at 332 calls this a tavern hall. Perhaps this is common in Europe, but "hall door" makes me think of a hallway door, not the entrance to a tavern. It also seems the door would slam open, not shut, since Roark is striding into the tavern. In any case, these are minor points.
239 You are about to decline when says something that convinces you to share the journey.
...when HE says...
294 After the defeat of Barraka, they fled south to escape the Sommlending army. It was a common belief in the Lastlands that the brotherhood had been destroyed and their power extinguished forever, but this encounter proves otherwise.
Shouldn't the tense here be is, not was?
301 Your Arrow pierces the lordling's forearm as his sword descends, causing the blow to splinter stone, not skull. (...) Trembling with pain and fury, he staggers to his feet and demands his sword and cloak from the innkeeper before stumbling into the night with a welter of threats and curses.
Why demand his sword when he already has it? Maybe he demands his horse and cloak? Maybe just his cloak? In 78 -> 180 he demands neither and just staggers out. I had to assume he survived even though I got an auto-kill in 78.